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* Memory and Humanity

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Lost in the darkness, hoping for a sign...
Instead there is only silence, Can't you hear my screams?
Never stop hoping, Need to know where you are...
But one thing is for sure, You're always in my heart...

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Post Last Edit by The.VincerR.E.X at 16-6-2010 10:54

ha cc rait kayaya salah ya ini yang buat ceritanya aku hwhwhwhwhhwwhwh TheVincerR.E.X bukan bilal kalo ga salah bilal bukan ini deh bilal kan starlight hwhwhwhwhhwhw

UPDATE MASIH 0% lagi dikerjakan ^^ kasih coment ya ^^

Edit: TQ cc raith Chain ^^
now till the chaos...
huwa cari ide baru

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Posted 16-6-2010 13:27 | Show Author
eehhhhh
emg ada apa dengan aq...???
Starlight, my first FF story
Moon Light Shine upon Darkness, but i can't still find the Light

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Posted 16-6-2010 16:34 | Show Author
wkwk 'memory and humanity' beneran dipake.

Seharusnya utk menambah misteri, di prolog make sudut pandang 3.
Trus chap 1 pake sudut pandang pertama, tapi bukan dari tokoh utama.
(menurut saya) mungkin bisa lbh menunjukkan unsur misterinya.
I wander through fiction to look for the truth
Buried beneath all the lies
And I stood at a distance to feel who you are
Hiding myself in your eyes

Hold on before it's too late
We'll run till we leave this behind
Don't fall just be who you are
It's all that we need in our lives

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Posted 16-6-2010 22:08 | Show Author
o0o tapi ga ngerti gw hwhwhwhhw minta editan Versi kaw Fun biar bisa bandingin saya lom bisa make Sudut pandang 3.

1aja masih ga bener >.< tapi udah ada kemajuan ga?
now till the chaos...
huwa cari ide baru

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request tokoh bisa cer?

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Posted 16-6-2010 23:48 | Show Author
mangga mawnya apa jadi apa tapi saya lagi mikir" buat perkenalan awal" dolo ya ^^
now till the chaos...
huwa cari ide baru

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Posted 17-6-2010 17:54 | Show Author
kemajuan?

Jujur menurut saya, gx beda jauh ma cerita awal buatan kamu...

Nanti stelah tgl 20 deh sya coba edit...
I wander through fiction to look for the truth
Buried beneath all the lies
And I stood at a distance to feel who you are
Hiding myself in your eyes

Hold on before it's too late
We'll run till we leave this behind
Don't fall just be who you are
It's all that we need in our lives

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kritik
tar yah gw pikir dlu nama yg bgs

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kemajuan?

Jujur menurut saya, gx beda jauh ma cerita awal buatan kamu...

Nanti stelah tgl 20 d ...
fun3ral Post at 17-6-2010 17:54


huaah sedih masih sama ya --''

@Bocah

ok di tunggu ini minta kritik dolo ama saran biar cerita selanjutnya bisa bagus ^^

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ya mau yg jujur kan?

Pasti dibantu kok... Berjuang n semangat deh!
I wander through fiction to look for the truth
Buried beneath all the lies
And I stood at a distance to feel who you are
Hiding myself in your eyes

Hold on before it's too late
We'll run till we leave this behind
Don't fall just be who you are
It's all that we need in our lives

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Posted 18-6-2010 14:35 | Show Author
ho oh gpp

siap dah ^^
now till the chaos...
huwa cari ide baru

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fun3ral

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Posted 21-6-2010 06:18 | Show Author
mana neh lanjutannya?

saya tunggu next chapnya...
I wander through fiction to look for the truth
Buried beneath all the lies
And I stood at a distance to feel who you are
Hiding myself in your eyes

Hold on before it's too late
We'll run till we leave this behind
Don't fall just be who you are
It's all that we need in our lives

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The.VincerR.E.X

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Posted 21-6-2010 12:26 | Show Author
sabar ya berhubung inspire ga keluar tunggu cair dolo inspire gw
now till the chaos...
huwa cari ide baru

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Posted 22-6-2010 15:50 | Show Author
@vince
kemajuan pesat!!!
jempol

wah, ada drago disitu!

oke, kritik dulu yah,
tolong kasih tanda baca yang jelas yah, saya liat disitu kurang titik koma, jadi pusing bacanya. dan keknya setting an note pad kamu ada yang salah, spasinya pada ga pas semua tuh,


gini nih triknya, biar settingan ga berubah2 klo mo di kopi,

tulis di note pad, Word Warpnya nyalain.
dah itu ga berubah2, klo pun berubah, akan menyesuaikan dengan setting tulisan kamu. tapi klo word warpnya di matiin, ntar ga bisa nyesuaiin ama tampilan di tempat laen.


mungkin setelah word warpnya dinyalain, settingnya jadi berubah lagi.
tapi abis itu ga ganti2 lagi kok.

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